Kenji+Ong


 * Lesson 1 Submission**

After going through my essays, I find that my two weakest areas are being unable to construct a good conclusion and crafting thesis statements and topic sentences.

The sites that I found useful are:

[] (writing conclusions)/ This source comes from the St. Cloud State University, and although the amount of content is significantly much less, but it’s quality in the words and the whole webpage is clear and concise as to what a conclusion should reflect and also some strategies for constructing a good conclusion.

[] (crafting thesis statements and topic sentences) This source comes from the University of Wisconsin and they actually list out step-by-step instructions and tips as to how to draft a thesis statement, from drafting all the way to refining it till finalization. They also show you how to pick a better thesis statement through extremely logical reasoning when you have more than one thesis statement to select from.


 * Lesson 2 Submission**

I would be working on a conclusion for the essay titled
 * GM (Genetically Modified) Food - boon or bane?**

I want to present a clear and concise conclusion which would encompass all my points and give a quick overview of what I have presented so far, and also I would show how the points that I have made support and explain what I have shown throughout the essay. Also, I would want to end of the conclusion by giving the reader something to think about, so that the essay would linger in their minds as they ponder about the question

These are the resources I will be using in the GM Food essay. [] [] [] [] []

GM Foods or Genetically Modified Foods are foods derived from genetically modified organisms. Typically, genetically modified foods are transgenic plant products: soybean, corn, canola, and cotton seed oil, but animal products have been developed as well. Boon refers to benefits and bane refers to a thing that ruins or spoils, in this case the thing would be GM Food.

Boons of GM Food would be that they have the potential to solve many of the world’s hunger and malnutrition problems, and they also help to increase the yield of crops which were previously often attacked by pests and destroyed, reducing reliance on chemical pesticides as the plants now have natural defence against the pests.

Banes of GM Food would be that the government has yet to do safety testing and regulation for many of the GM Food currently available out there. Furthermore, there has not been an international policy for GM Food so far, and seeing the potential of GM Food as an essential need for the future, we cannot afford to cause unintended harm to human health and the environment as a result to harness the prowess of this technology.

Undoubtedly, GM food has the unlimited potential to solve world hunger problems, and it has statistically shown to increase crop yields by making them pest-resistant and also by making them mature faster. However, the issue about GM Foods not being properly checked and certified has not yet been resolved. Until then, countries like Brazil would definitely not open up to accept GM Foods, and since GM Food may be an extremely important technology for the future, it is definitely essential to cross out this bane as soon as possible. Therefore, I feel that GM Food has definitely more boon than bane, but we must learn how to harness the powers of this technology properly in order to prepare ourselves for the future. We wouldn’t want to kill off our next generation with our invention right?
 * Conclusion paragraph:**


 * Lesson 3 Submission**

Peer Review Kwang Ming: Hi Kenji, after reading your paragraph, I felt that you indeed have addressed and summarized most of your points in your conclusion. I also like the idea of ending off with a rhethorical question for readers to ponder about after they've finished your argumentative essay. I think the structure of a conclusion is pretty straightforward and your conclusion is sufficient. However, I feel that maybe you could refine the rhethorical question. Currently, I do not feel that the questions would leave readers pondering. Maybe you change it such that it sums up the discussion topic as well? This way, it'll leave others to think about what you've written in your argument. As a whole, I think it was a pretty good job (:


 * Lesson 4 Submission**